Fighting the Wolf
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Ashley is a werewolf, this story is from her point of view.
The full moon is out.
I sink back further into the shadows, knowing that I will shift once the light touches me. I feel charged with anticipation begging to be set free. It would be so easy to forget why I'm trying to be good. To forget how much Eli wants me to be good.
Maybe I could shift, just this once. He wouldn't have to know. Just spend a little time running. I could go into the woods far away from town, so that no one gets hurt. I want so badly to go out and be free. I start to step into the moonlight, when Eli slips into my mind.
How can you do that every month?
I can't help it.
Yeah, you can. You told me it's easier to control when you stay out of the moonlight.
That's my boyfriend, always seeing things black and white.
That doesn't mean I want to. Besides, it's not like I'm killing anyone.
Yet. You have to stop this.
Remembering how demanding he had been pissed me off all over again. Eli can't control me. Is it so different for a 16 year old to want some independence? As human-me is still at war over what to do, the wolf steps out under that glorious full moon.
I grin as I start to shift, loving the way it feels. I take off full-speed towards the woods, hoping to get there soon where the only breakable things around are trees and deer. Speaking of deer, the wolf is hungry.
Reaching the edge of the woods, I stop and listen, inhaling deeply through my nose. Three deer, to the right a bit. This'll be easy. Slowly and quietly, I walk over to where the deer are, focusing on the large buck. I wait until he walks a little way from the rest, and then I strike. It's an easy kill, a quick snap to the neck and he's down. I eat until I'm full, then wipe my mouth off and start through the woods.
It's quiet, but in a relaxing way. The other animals have started to clear out, sensing a predator near. I smile and start running, enjoying the electrifying moonlight on my skin. Suddenly, I feel a small buzz and stop, realizing it's my phone. I open up the text and groan when I read it.
Hope you're enjoying your run in the moonlight. Talk to you in school tomorrow.
Guess I didn't really expect Eli not to figure out what I was doing, but he could at least cut out some of the sarcasm. Oh well, might as well enjoy the night while it lasts. I put the phone back in my pocket and start running again.
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This is told in such a fluid manner. You entice your reader into your story bit by bit and share the freedom of your moonlight run. It would not be difficult to read into this an allegory of youthful vigor and a yearning for escape.
A modern day werewolf indeed. I suppose it was a matter of time until technology changed the old ways. This is an adorable story Katy.
Mom
Thank you. :)
Hyphenbird
Thank you. I wanted to approach a more modern and unconventional type of werewolf, and am glad that came across well.
mckbirdbks
Thank you, I am happy that you enjoyed the story.
Look out 'Twilight'... Katy Katz is in town!
This is immediately engaging, cool and quirky!
Really loved it -- Voted UP & Awesome, mar.
marcoujor
Thank you!
I enjoyed your story, Katy...I have written of the wolves myself and the plight of those affected by its curse. You took a different angle...a bit more sympathetic to the nature of the wolf itself...maybe that is what keeps the curse alive. At the same time, I sense you are young and the unbridled freedom of the wolf appeals to you. There's a bit of rebellion displayed in the story which is fine. Even when we write fiction, a part of ourselves creeps into it for that is what we know best. You wrote this from a first person in the eyes of the wolf perspective and that was a good choice in that you could share the experiences of the wolf rather than just reading them to the reader from an observer's perspective...good choice. That is an indication of your talent because many writers struggle with writing from that perspective...they always write from the observer's viewpoint telling a story. This method draws the reader in quickly and adds to the adventure. When you have a chance, read my story on "Coyotes"...I think you will enjoy it. Keep on writing! Rated up! WB
Wayne
Thank you, I will definitely read your story.
Katy,
Such a wonderful story. You kept my attention, as you brought a modern day twist. I loved it. I think this could do very well in a series..I hope you will continue to write more..Thank you for sharing.. Great Job!
I'm not much into werewolves but you story is well written with an interesting point of view.
dahoglund
Thank you
Sunnie Day
Thank you, I'm working on a second part right now.
I like the fluidity of the narrative... not knowing exactly where the human and the wolf are blending... or interacting.
Wolf morals and human morals!
I'm glad to see that you're working in a second part. It cries out for it... Howls, even!.
Well done.
Twilight Lawns
Thank you, I'm glad you stopped by.
My turn to comment Katy, I'm agreeing with Wayne Brown about your choice of point of view, works well in this story. I'm glad you didn't go into detail about killing and eating the deer, just enough, and then off and running in the moon light. Nice images, and a sweet sense of freedom. Good work. Regards, snakeslane
snakeslane
Thank you. I considered going into more detail with the deer, but decided against it at the last minute.
Becky Katz Level 8 Commenter 3 months ago
Beautiful story Katy. I haven't got the fiction stuff figured out yet but you are a natural. Loved it.